And I think, ladies and gentleman… it’s the winner. Yes? No? Maybe? I start sending tomorrow… Weee! 
Ten years ago, a legend was born among the Teken Clansmen; one Lord Arthus intends to keep secret.
Each Teken is born with a mark, but tenth year Deglan Borian’s mark has been morphing again, unlike any of his peers. His sleep is plagued with danger and a pale faced girl who is calling for him to find her. When the Teken authorities catch wind of his mark, Deglan’s parents encourage him to find the girl, regardless of where it takes him.
Daydreamer Meia is a troubled foster child who moves to a new home every few months. When she’s not in the clouds, she spends her time in a make believe world, far from the cares of the schoolyard. Normal ten-year-old girls dream of tea parties and dolls, but not Meia. Her dreams come from the pages of an adventure book and stretch well into the fantasy world and beyond.
Meia can hardly contain her joy when her new foster parents decide to take her on the vacation of a lifetime. The Cook Islands have been the backdrop for her dreams since before she could remember.
When Meia meets Deglan on the Penrhyn atoll, both of their lives will change forever. Secrets of the legend come to life and haunt their every move. Only one minor problem… Meia is a human and Deglan is… a dragon.
Delgan Rising is a Midgrade Fantasy complete at 37,500 words.
Dragons Forever
Inspirational Fiction
This one is my favorite. I like that you start with a hook. Still I would try to trim the Fat out of paragraph 3 and 4 so you can combine them into one paragraph. Like, do we really need to be told that little girl's daydream about tea parties? We kinda already know this, yes? We don't need to know this in order to understand your story, right?
Just trying to help you make it perfect and succinct ;)
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