Which sometimes can be a blow, considering it’s your tip top agent! But at the same time, I think it’s good for your character to get a no. It helps move your forward and to the final goal of publication.

So yes, I did push send on five queries this morning… and I feel pretty good about it. I am actually thinking I will get at least one partial or full out of these requests. Not holding my breath, but I am crossing my fingers. *wink*

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Feel free to comment and let me know what you think… it’s a work in progress but it’s close Oh and go me, I finished Deglan Rising on Friday! Wooot!

QUERY: Deglan Rising

Ten years ago a legend was born, only no one knew it.

With the Rising Ceremony looming on the horizon of the lunar eclipse, Deglan is the only member of the Teken Clan not excited about Rising. While his peer’s dream of their place in society, Deglan can’t shake the feeling he was meant for something more.

Each Teken Clansman is born with a mark, used to place them into society. Deglan’s morphing mark brings unwanted attention of the leader of the Teken Clan, Lord Arthus. Scared for his life, his parents encourage him to run and find the pale faced girl from his dreams.

Daydreamer Meia is a troubled foster child who moves to a new home every few months. When she’s not in the clouds, she spends her time in a make believe world, far from the cares of the schoolyard. Normal ten-year-old girls dream of tea parties and dolls, but not Meia. Her dreams come from the pages of an adventure book and stretch well into the fantasy world and beyond.

Meia can hardly contain her joy when her new foster parents decide to take her on the vacation of a lifetime. The Cook Islands have been the backdrop for her dreams since before she could remember.

When Deglan meets Meia on the Penrhyn atoll, both of their lives will change forever. Secrets of the legend come to life and haunt their every move. Only one minor problem… Meia is a human and Deglan is… a dragon.

Delgan Rising is a Midgrade Fantasy complete at 37,500 words.

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By the way… this is in rough draft form!

Without further adieu…

Deglan Rising a 30-35K Midgrade Fantasy Novel

The time of rising has come for those of age in the Teken Clan. Marked at birth, each Teken must accept the role given to them to continue their society as it has always been. No one has ever dared challenge the ways of the Teken… until now.

Ten-year-old Deglan knows he is different from the rest of his Clansmen. While his classmates excel in their instruction, Deglan’s mind wonders about far off places he’s sure exist outside the borders of their Island Nation in the middle of the Pacific Ocean. Deglan’s peers anxiously anticipate the Rising Ceremony, which takes place under the lunar eclipse, each knowing they will finally have a purpose to life. Deglan, on the other hand, can’t shake the feeling that he was meant for more than this.

Plagued with nightmares after finding out his mark may doom him, Deglan awakes the morning of the eclipse to find Teken authorities breaking down his door. His parents encourage him to flee and follow the voice in his dream to journey across his world and into the next searching for the answers to the meaning of his life. When he crosses paths with Meia, a face and voice from his dreams, he wonders if she could be the key to his destiny.

Only one problem, Meia is from the forbidden human clan and Deglan is… a dragon.

(EDITED with MVs Suggestions)

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Why… because it’s so darn fun! I had the idea for this novel while driving around town. I think I was somewhere in Southeastern Littleton or Northern Centennial when I had the idea… and it hit me like a baseball flying out of control at someone not paying attention. It smacked me on the noggin and gave me an “Ah ha!!” moment.

DD10 was in the car at the time, so of course I ran over it with her… seeing as how she is the MG market. Her response was just so-so, but she thought the boys would really enjoy it. Knowing that there is a GREAT need for MG boys books (That means Denise, you better get writing) I certainly knew there is a good market for it.

So I did something I have never done… ever.  I wrote my query… first! There was no story yet, not even a Once Upon A Time… Nothing written in this novel until after I wrote the query. I shared it with a couple people to gauge the idea and got such positive feed back I knew I needed to write this.

Then comes the first chapter. Written in a day, I read it to my market group (my kids- Girl 10, Boy 9 and boy 7) and they LOVED IT! I mean so much so that for the next two days they played around with the idea in their imaginative playtime!

*jawdrops* PERFECT!

I read chapter two with them and again, all kids giggled in the right places and DD10 picked out what MIGHT be happening.

*YAY*

Now after reading chapter three, they were white knuckling the table. “Is that it?!” Says one of them. I think they wanted more

Could I be onto something? I think so…

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The funniest/craziest part of this request… I didn’t query for it.

No, true story! Honest!

I did query HER… sorta, if you could call that a query I sent. It was more like a “Umm yah, here is the deal *blah* and what do you think?” #truestory, you can ask her when she is my awesome agent…! Anyhow, my email was about my non-fiction stuff. And so she emailed me back and basically said she was “fascinated” by the ideas and then proceeded to ask me for a partial of my fiction novel.

*SWEET*

Only umm, which do I give her? ROTFL… I have three completed. And she reps all three… Can you say PERFECT AGENT?! And one of my top 5… umm panic.

Yes, I have been saying “umm” a lot since reading the email.

So needless to say… I am polishing my RINGS OF TIME and sending it to her immediately. Wow, just wow.

If you need me… I will be slaving away at the spit shinning thing… or fainted on the floor. Whichever.

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Having sent a partial to an agent before I left, I knew I needed to really examine the RINGS OF TIME MS and objectively see what she saw. I love the story. REALLY… but when I looked at it, I screamed (nay aloud). Had I really just sent this snoozer to an agent?!?!?!

*headdesk*

Now… it’s not a snoozer of a story. Really, it’s quite fun and fast paced… but the beginning was freaking BORING. Well okay, not BORING BORING, just not a reach out and grab you thing. Which I knew. My beta readers (and Authonomy peeps way back when) mentioned this… some loved the bookshop description… some said SNOOZE. I sided with the first set. But now that I have written another novel that totally grabs your from the start… I re-neg and side with the latter.

Which means (but is not limited to) a whole lot of work for me… and a cease in query. Luckily, I have only queried it three times… and only one has requested a partial. So I know the premise is good… but I have decided my delivery might be off…

So, I am shifting POVs for the novel. It’s going first person, baby! And I am going to let her freak flag fly! Oh, wait… well, she is quite normal… at the beginning of the novel anyway. Just wait till novel 2, SECRETS OF MANDOR… the freak flag is florescent pink!

Anyhow, so I have some serious rewriting to do… so if you need me. I will be over there… changing all the she, her, Emma’s to Me, my, and I… not to mention rewriting quirks into it.

Fun times…

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In any event, if I don’t make goals for the week, things aren’t going to go as well as they could. Turning older takes thought and consideration. If I don’t have it written down, I just might think too much about the fact I am almost old…er.

So, goals… Yes.

• Finish my UNSEEN CHRONICLE on Good Friday events. Its a long one… I thought it would be a quick 2K story… now pushing 4 and I am not done yet. I am not sure why I didn’t expect that. We are talking major events here. I am just hoping to do it justice.
• Not think about the fact I am older… Must be on my list.
• Raise more support for Ethiopia (See that post here) because I need to turn in my first deposit on May 1st and this is totally something I feel like I need to do!
• Not think about the fact I turned in a partial and it’s on her desk now… :-0 Try to focus on something else… anything else.
• Switch up my kids book. I realized it’s missing… SOMETHING. Yah, Uber Secret here LOL YA is so hot right now you have to be else someone will snatch it up LOL
• Try to get DS7 into the doctor for allergies/asthma/RAD/RSV he struggles and he sounds like a seal today.
• Plant my garden… after the snow. Goodness, gotta love Colorado! Yes, it’s going to snow.
• Drink a lot of coffee.
• Read the third Percy Jackson book
• School with kiddos, I can’t believe it’s April already! Where did my year go?
• Make my own doctor appointment to find out what is up with the hip pain after running recently. (Old… old, old, old is going to be the answer… I am sure.)
• Not thinking about the emails I am NOT receiving regarding my partial
• And just generally have a great week…

Sounds like a good set of goals to me… and not terribly unobtainable.

*DS7 coughs barks in the background*

Time to go make that appointment…

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But the reason they poked you, totally worth it… right?

Well okay, not always… but maybe sometimes. Like say:

*poke* “Hey isn’t this your stop?”
*poke* “Aren’t you suppose to be leaving?”
*poke* “Is that your car being towed?”
*poke* “Your butt’s onfire!”

You know, those types are totally worth the pain.

So yah, I was poked yesterday. Okay, maybe not to tell me my butt was on fire, though really it needs to catch a spark or two… but for completely different reasons. It was the kind of poke that makes you say… “OMGoodness is that a fire?!?! Quick put it out!”

“What, pray tell, are you talking about Eisley Jacobs?”

I am so glad you asked… I received my ABNA reviews back yesterday… there was definitely a poke in there. Like a quick hard one that made me fall off my chair. One that told me, “You missed the mark.”

Ouch.

Now, I bet you are wondering where the “awesome” part of the title comes in… Haha, well it’s the whole idea, “I want to know if my butt’s on fire” kinda thing. And my butt was just about to light up like a Olympic Torch in a NO FIRE ZONE! Because I was turning in the first 30 pages of this SAME manuscript… in the morning. THIS morning.

Still again, where is the awesome? Well… Haha this is the place I come in and tell you to ALWAYS go with your gut… ALWAYS. Because I didn’t… And my butt almost caught on fire.

“Explain, Eisley Jacobs.”

I had a prologue in THE RINGS OF TIME that was a dream sequence. It was ominous and dark and really just set up the idea of the book… very, very loosely. VERY. It was designed to make the reader say, “WHAT THE HECK!” and apparently it did… but one of the reviewers said he thought it was two different books. ROTFL… Oops.

Okay, so yah. I already knew this… months ago. I actually took the prologue out a long time ago. Like 8-10 months? But upon some advice, I added it back in… though I didn’t know if I should. Oh well. I did. Peer pressure! Haha… Ahem. My fault. No ones but mine. Moving on.

Then I had this flashback sequence… I loved writing it. And it was chapter 2… but another peer says, you should make that the first chapter so we know “THIS AND THAT” right up front. Against better judgement, and my gut, I switched it around. Again, my fault.

When I uploaded my chapters to ABNA I realized the parts they would read didn’t even have much mention of my MC! But that should be okay… right?

Uhhh, no. No. No. No. No. NO! Eisley, your gut said right then that something was wrong… why, pray tell, did you not fix it?

*headdesk*

So when these reviews arrived yesterday as I am prepping my partial submission… I realized I needed to bring it back to it’s true form… and I did. Which brings in the awesome. The reviews arrived JUST IN TIME.

No prologue… Chapter 2 is now chapter 1… chapter 1 fits right in as a flash back… and chapter 3 fits blends right through.

PHEW!

Thanks for the timely *POKE* ABNA reviewers… I needed that. I might be sore… but it was worth the pain because I am going with my GUT!

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What am I talking about… well, so glad you asked.

On Monday an agent (one we will call “Lovely Agent”) tweeted that she was being quite the pushover… so everyone should query her today.

Ohh! Lovely Agent, it just so happens that you are on my top five “To Be Queried” list… should I? Shouldn’t I? Seems silly to–ohh fingers what are you doing?

My tweet back: Awesome! (or something) I have a query already drafted to you in my box, I should send it now! Haha! (or something)

Fingers still working frantically: Lovely Agent, you said you were a pushover today… So I thought, “Huh, opportune moment!” here is my query. It rawks (Okay, I didn’t say that… but close).

THE RINGS OF TIME – YA Fantasy 75,000 words

Fingers pushed send (actually, I think it was my mouse moving on it’s own accord) and then I giggled… followed by panic. Most of you know I use a pen name (because my real name is taken in the world of publishing…) so I have two emails. One for my family, one for the author world… Oops. I sent it via the real me and signed via the stealth me.

*headdesk*

Oh well, she will get this email from JOE NORMAL ME signed Eisley Jacobs and think… what the heck? Personality crisis? No explanation no nothing… Just signed it with my pen name.

*headdesk*

So… if I never heard from her again except to say, “I think you need to take your meds regularly…” I will be okay with that.

Her website said 8-10 weeks to hear back, so really, I wrote it off and thought lovely things about Lovely Agent and terrible things about me… Eisley (cant remember to switch her email) Jacobs.

So the SHOCKER was to get an email in my box Tuesday afternoon from Lovely Agent requesting a partial.

*jaw drops to the floor*

I guess she didn’t take her meds that day either So we are both unmedicated and it all worked peachy! Hahah!

Ahem, so… yes. I got a request for a partial. She said she was intrigued… I am happy. <– Understatement of the century.

Where’s my party hat?

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I am not sure if I’m more happy or shocked really. I can’t believe it’s already been a month but I am glad I don’t have to wait much longer.

In other news, I think I have decided to record myself reading the first chapters of my novels, though this might be a super challenge since I have 6 kids in the house usually. I did my first pass tonight, on Runaway Choices, and it went okay. Only fumbled a few words… and snorted at myself in the recording. So maybe this is a terrible idea? Plus I am rotten as a man voice… Really.

Tomorrow, Monday, how I loathe thee.

I digress…

I will probably be mapping out Mandorian Prophecies Book 3 (Restoration) this week, seeing as how I need to do that SOMETIME… I have never actually mapped out a book before, but since its the final in a trilogy… I must.

Should be interesting

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